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    dots Submission Name: Your Poems Suckdots
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    Author: Ur.Poems.Suck
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 61/28/3
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Prose/Society
    Total Views: 1469
    Average Vote:    1.0000
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    dotsYour Poems Suckdots
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    Look
    It's a bird in the sky and it's flying
    Isn't that neat

    Hey what you said was so cool
    We must be soulmates
    I love you
    Will you be my online lover?
    I can't handle real relationships
    So it will be fine
    Let's masturbate to that thought together
    at 10 p.m. my time, 6 a.m. your time
    and it will be like we are together having sex

    Maybe there is milk in my nose
    I laughed so hard

    I don't know how to write anything good
    and I don't want to buy a diary so I vent
    and call it poetry
    Some people call it art or a form of expression
    I just call it ranting
    I've got them fooled
    and I've got their sympathy
    Two birds in one basket

    Look
    It's a rock
    How romantic
    It reminds me of you
    Unable to expand because it can't think

    I don't know how to form sentences
    So I type one or two word lines
    and let the reader fill in the blanks
    because I don't want to think about
    having to put effort into it
    but it works well with our A.D.D.

    Stumbled over
    My
    Own
    Tongue
    In gardens
    Made artificial
    Emotions

    Now wasn't that easy and thought provoking?

    Leave a comment below about what you read above
    To prove to me that I am right
    that not only can't you write
    but your comprehension skills need improvement too
    Or are you one that gets your inspiration
    from those little magnets they sell?




    Submitted on 2007-06-04 12:14:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I am reposting this comment to you,
    Please think when commenting on peoples
    writings,they can only take so much hurtful
    comments till they go at you until you understand why they are attcking you,
    well you know what they say different strokes
    for different folks
    not all are born with a
    Whitman or a Poe mind right?
    i see you are new here i read your journal sounds like someone piss-ed in your wheaties

    every writer has something to say some will
    like what they read and give a good critique.

    some will pass it by without saying word

    so continue to read the work here at this site and comment on how you see fit.
    just remember if your comments are harsh or hurtful. their heads will rear and bite back welcome aboard dude or dudette
    the comment you said that 93 % of people here suck has put you in the situation you are now in

    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by Sashenka | [ Reply to This ]
      hahaha... damn gud man... tho kinda xplicit... bt still... esp d "stumbld ovr...." part's 'deep n intense'.... ulp :S!
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by esoterica | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm commenting on this due to the fact that several have come to me asking if this was my alias.

    Hell no. This satire is a joke. Anyone knows I can outdo this proleptic garbage.

    The writers of elite skills do NOT suck. And your work merits you no bearing to trash another's.

    Persist and I will cash you out.

    MyX
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      Ugly but honest.
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
      I love you. ;)

    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by sunsetserenity | [ Reply to This ]
      You sound familiar.
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]
      ES Etiquette:
    Submit only 1 or 2 submissions per day. Reply to those who have commented on your work. Continually being rude and not caring to comment will eventually get you deleted.

    Unless you own the site.... Do you?
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]
      ya look i am not the one how put that poem up there it was my little bro and ow do u del them from the list


    and nice poem dud
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by jjd | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for your input and critique on Acbadadea - I don't think my writings are boring at all but some certainly may.

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Creative expression is without guidelines or limits - this write sums up your opinion and your "rant" is just as you describe.

    Thanks for sharing your opinion.

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh yes. Agreed. It will be interesting to read some of your serious poetry. You sound like a worthwhile person to associate with.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]
      Amusing
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
      funny as helllz. this piece is good. pretty true to.

    i look forward to be reading more of ur stuff. ur views are interesting.



    laterrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr

    Grim

    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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