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still my obsession


Author: DontLetGo421
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still my obsession



so you finally got what you were asking for
left in the desperation of a teenage whore

i am above this, i have always been higher
constantly trying to hard,i began to grow tired

you picked me up, i was at my lowest state
my voice came but it was already too late

'for you were already there getting your satisfaction
you are an obsession, a tease, a sick distraction

keep checking my missed calls, hoping i am mistaken
realizing this was a risk i should have never taken

so now that its over i cant help but question
if you are so evil why are you still my obsession




Submitted on 2007-06-04 14:59:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  we cant pick and choose who we love and who we dont
and its usually the ones that hurt us the most that we love
i know this feeling all to well and still after 2 months im hoping he will dump his new gf and come back
great poem tho
love stacey
| Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
  Probably because you are young and naive, but in a few years you will find that letting go is better and hopefully your spelling will improve as well. It is not that hard to capitalize I.
| Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Ur.Poems.Suck | [ Reply to This ]


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