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    dots Submission Name: still my obsessiondots

    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsstill my obsessiondots

    so you finally got what you were asking for
    left in the desperation of a teenage whore

    i am above this, i have always been higher
    constantly trying to hard,i began to grow tired

    you picked me up, i was at my lowest state
    my voice came but it was already too late

    'for you were already there getting your satisfaction
    you are an obsession, a tease, a sick distraction

    keep checking my missed calls, hoping i am mistaken
    realizing this was a risk i should have never taken

    so now that its over i cant help but question
    if you are so evil why are you still my obsession

    Submitted on 2007-06-04 14:59:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      we cant pick and choose who we love and who we dont
    and its usually the ones that hurt us the most that we love
    i know this feeling all to well and still after 2 months im hoping he will dump his new gf and come back
    great poem tho
    love stacey
    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
      Probably because you are young and naive, but in a few years you will find that letting go is better and hopefully your spelling will improve as well. It is not that hard to capitalize I.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Ur.Poems.Suck | [ Reply to This ]

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