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    dots Submission Name: Where are the Truths?dots
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    Author: dreamer37517
    ASL Info:    25/F/Bama
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 161/149/49
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsWhere are the Truths?dots
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    So many questions
    Floating through my head.
    Swimming through the lies,
    Drowning in the dread.

    Sugar coated fibs
    Hiding in disguise.
    Finding out truths were
    Chocolate covered lies.

    Endless accusations
    Pointing here and there.
    Leading up and down,
    Directions of despair.

    Mulitple wonders
    Running through my mind.
    Jogging through this chaos,
    What truths will I find?




    Submitted on 2007-06-04 17:13:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah it is a very well- written write, just a thing to point out, the spelling "Mulitple", it must be multiple, i guess, so thanks for sharing and if you have time please take a look to my writings,
    have a nice day
    peace and love
    Victor
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad but true. You have a knack for the emotions, and even though you said it was venting, it honestly didn't sound like it. The chocolate covered lies would have to be my favorite part. Your imagery is great, and though your flow seemed a little bit off, it was consistent enough to know that it wasn't just an accident. Like Saint Raxor, you kinda drop off at the end, but then again, it is a vent. Good job!
    Cheers,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good. I loved the second stanza, it was wicked awesome. The only I didn't like is that when I got to the end, I wanted to read more, but it just dropped off and left me hanging. Other than that, it was great. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Raxor
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]


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