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    dots Submission Name: The Mixes Make the Madnessdots
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    Author: taramarie
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 54/107/61
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       intoxication


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    dotsThe Mixes Make the Madnessdots
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    Or something dull like that.

    I'm shattered
    back in the urban strawl
    with a heart that has hardened
    and a hope that has started to haunt.



    all my masks have been
    worn through...
    my every move is easily
    seen and reduced to
    spectators ash.

    I don't know how i become
    loved or where the boat
    will need to dock.

    but here i am.
    twenty years old and
    over it.

    his feelings, her ego
    oh fuck off.
    i'm busy looking up ways
    to remember who i
    was.

    The only real love that ever
    mattered was severed
    from me.
    And like every other
    amputee i can
    sometimes feel what
    was cut off of me.



    the dreams are
    cracking me open.
    creaking and erupting
    im falling all over the floor,
    in bits and pieces.

    Fumbling & bumbling
    I'm your girl.




    Submitted on 2007-06-04 20:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i hate sadness.
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      Dang, you've got it bad. This is pretty flippin awesome. I feel you compleatly. The hurt, the frustration. Very beautifuly worded.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Peachpitt | [ Reply to This ]


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