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    dots Submission Name: I love you I love youdots
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    Author: Cricket
    ASL Info:    19/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 81/51/27
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/
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    Bytes: 415



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       I just think that people have lost the meaning of I love you...


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    I love you I love you!
    Thats what they say.

    I love you I love you!
    Just not as much today.

    I love you I love you!
    Its at the end of my letter.

    I love you I love you!
    3 words make you feel better?

    I love you I love you!
    you know that its true.

    I love you I love you!
    I might have told him that to...




    Submitted on 2007-06-04 21:51:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can totally relate to this piece. You write wonderfully, and I am in such a situation that maybe I have forgotten what love is... but I still tell him I do, only because I remember that I used to...

    necrotic
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the way someone can relate to this and the whole sort of fakeness of what when people say "I love you"

    But maybe you could elaborate more on the idea, make it longer and use other examples of what people say but may not mean.
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by SuperEdgar | [ Reply to This ]


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