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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Thread as dark as the night
    Needle as sharp as a blade

    These scars hold secrets so deep
    Like a waterfall pulling you down

    Trying to get free, suffocating
    The girl in the mirror she laughs

    I try to tell her it's alright
    But my voice can't be heard
    And in a silent movie, I'm a character

    Sweet blood drips in a rhythmatic sway
    As I draw pretties on my wrist

    And this faintly beating heart
    Grown cold and battered
    Broken into peices that's still gone

    "mend.. mend"
    In and out
    Criss-cross, underneath

    "mended" she said
    And it was... for now.

    These scars won't heal
    They scream and haunt
    "screw up" they remind


    How long does it take to heal?
    As long as I decide to breath

    And forever it takes...




    Submitted on 2007-06-05 10:25:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ;-; *fav*
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
      You should try Neosporin for that. Scars heal quicker if you don't pick at them.
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by Ur.Poems.Suck | [ Reply to This ]


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