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    dots Submission Name: One becomes twodots
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    Author: kapri49
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 31/69/30
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1431
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 387



    Description:
       I would like any and all comments..I would also like to know what everyone thinks this means


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    dotsOne becomes twodots
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    One day
    One time
    One joy
    Two hearts

    One day
    One mistake
    One bliss
    Is it too late?

    One thought
    One call
    One prayer
    But is that two beats I hear?

    One day
    One time
    One joy
    Two hearts

    One girl
    One boy
    But one
    Becomes two...




    Submitted on 2007-06-05 11:16:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi welcome another canadian i dont see to many on this site
    yor piece was soft and simple and depends on the mood of the reader is what they can get from yor words

    i like it but i dont give negitive comments on anything as i am not a critique

    sandman
    | Posted on 2007-06-08 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple and nice,
    that's all i have to say
    :)
    Keep up the write yo

    Peace,
    Dennis
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by StylerDen | [ Reply to This ]


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