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    dots Submission Name: jamie...dots

    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    don't get attached
    but how can i not
    your pulling me in
    to your life
    and hard
    pulling me down
    swallow me whole
    i'll never return
    your wife's back
    so sue me
    or just kick me to the curb
    telling me i was nothing
    and thats all we had
    alone in the dark
    a monster arives
    when he's unmasked
    it's you inside

    Submitted on 2007-06-05 11:53:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is how i feel right now and you portrayed it through words really really well. i have a fetish for poems that rhyme so if it did rhyme i'd probably like it better but it was still a really good write. i agree wtih the other person that the flow was well and your feelings were deffinately there.

    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
      ah here again, this is my 2nd attempt to submit a comment.

    well you see, what I wanted to say is that...

    its rather funny that the lover was the monster and its the monster that unmasks to show the face of a lover.

    Very distinct from the usual forms. Actually it would be the other way around.

    Flow is swell. feelings are strong.
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]

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