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    dots Submission Name: ILLUSIONSdots
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    Author: kittycampbel
    ASL Info:    23 male uganda
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 53/72/25
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 621
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1244



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       call it fantasy, thinking about someone you really care about. happy moments for every body


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    dotsILLUSIONSdots
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    Just sitted like a poet in his last days
    Rays of the morning sun penetrating into my Hut,
    I see reflections of you and me.
    Those eyes that you posses spoke more than You did
    They made my heart ache to love
    The youth in Me came to life
    The Rosy sheen of seventeen filled me.
    I wanted to let you know I could care
    This whole world about you....

    Shall I compare thee to a sweet fragrance in the air or
    The freshness of the early morning wind?
    For you made me commit the deadliest of all
    Sins when I said
    'I swear to God thou art a walking angel....
    I will write about your beauty' description until
    the pen runs dry.'

    You truely are .......the tray of eggs
    Which they hold with both hands
    So calm, so dedicated, so beautiful.....
    That tolerates lovely-dear-poor me..

    Baby just come back to me

    After you, I don want to love again
    For I the son of woman
    Will have accomplished the Golden rule of Love
    'To love you, my neighbour, so deeply as myself'
    And I will dwell in contentment forever.

    KCSAMMY




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