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    dots Submission Name: Sunday morning on the Riverdots

    Author: maltestrauss
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 6/3/4
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       This poem I wrote, describes a screne at Florida's St John's River. This ist Floridas largest River and I believe the only one in North America flowing from south to North. Most of it is in a pretty natural state and vast swampland and natural preserves adjoining this body of water.

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    dotsSunday morning on the Riverdots

    The sun awakes, the River site
    with cloudless weather, blue and bright
    while herons looking here for fish
    as Sunday’s early breakfast dish.
    The water’s face is smooth as glass
    when dragonflies appear in mass,
    and mangrove trees were standing still
    but wind is picking up until
    the ocean breeze gives moving life
    a cormorant performs a dive
    and vultures sitting in between
    the trees and watch the playful scene.
    A speeding fisher leaves a wake
    the water mirror starts to break
    and lilies use the swell to sway
    and dance into the newborn day.

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      Ah, so very excellent! Perfect meter and near perfect rhyme, not often seen on this site, especially in combination! Fine, fine job here...loved it! bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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