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    dots Submission Name: Miss Americadots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Eh, just watch Miss Congeniality. Wrote about the girl Gracie Hart..from my own perspective..those of u who seen the movie may agree..some what..or not..u choose...enjoy and do plz comment! Love ya all!


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    dotsMiss Americadots
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    She is one in a million
    Exquisite priceless gem
    Annonymous stranger
    Smile's brighter than the climax of an eclipse

    One for all and all for one
    Will never leave your side
    She doesnt care about
    Materialistic opinions and such

    She is Miss America
    She lives in every female
    And she goes from a stranger
    to a lovely swan lake princess overnight

    To Miss America, you make everyday inspiring for the next




    Submitted on 2004-06-15 20:41:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well done, first stanza I think is a permutation of that classic pageant song sung by the guy in the tux. Got an extra 'n' in anonymous.

    The second stanza has a good statement, but I think the wording is off. Mat. opinions and such is grating to the ear, when I think its best for it to be graceful (even more so than that physically obsessed Miss America song). It sings of the greatest virtues, selflessness, and loyalty, and the fact that all of the pampered beauties profess one thing simply because they are told that is what they should wish for is in contrast to that. This Miss America, who is every miss america, is that inspirational hope we really need, not a tv show with bikini babes.

    And for those guys, not clad in tuxes, but sing this song, they can find that potential in so many (because people in this world are essentially good after all), and in strangers find winners, without changing their eyes, but only using them to see so much more.

    Last stanza is just messed up by the last line, lovely swan lake princess is to long. I personally think 'lake' is the worst part, ya, its a ballet reference, but here it detracts from graceful sound (which I've already stated the importance of). Pitting the allusion against perfect illusion is something I rarely do, being very fond of the external references myself (go T.S. Eliot!) but for once I think one should be cut in some way.
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by DocJonathan | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool poem... In the last stanza the flow is a little off.. but besides that I like it. And I like that movie! :) Original idea to base it on the movie..
    | Posted on 2004-06-15 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]


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