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    dots Submission Name: Self-titled Puppetsdots
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    Author: sunsetserenity
    ASL Info:    21/f
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 23/17/12
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 748
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       Growing into an adult requires making important decisions by yourself..

    This is frightening to me.


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    dotsSelf-titled Puppetsdots
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    Control us.
    Pull these strings that we've attached.
    Command us.
    Make us walk forward,
    And make us come back.

    We're self-titled puppets.
    Give us words to speak.
    Pull that string to move our arms,
    And pull that one
    To move our feet.

    Under control
    Of what you want us to be.
    Under a spell.
    We like this bondage.
    We call this free.

    We're self-titled puppets.
    We like it this way.
    We're scared to move on our own.
    Afraid to choose.
    Afraid of mistakes.

    We're afraid of mistakes.




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      well i love the title loved it. the puppet master thing has been done but they way the stanza are set up it's like a little marionettes dancing
    | Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      There are mistakes you intentionally make and mistakes you unintentionally make. The intentional ones are the ones you should try and limit. The unintentional ones just happen.

    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by Ur.Poems.Suck | [ Reply to This ]
      Your description; I know exactly how you feel. I just turned 18 in March and everything scares me now ahah. I even feel old and am now afraid of getting older. It sucks.

    This poem is amazing, dude. I loved every word. My friends and I actually discuss the topic of your poem amongst ourselves. You might see it in a way of making decisions or growing up, but I kind of see this in a way of describing society.

    Good job. I like the easy flow and how the words just fit together. I'm gonna make my friend read this (:

    Fav.
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]


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