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    dots Submission Name: missing puzzlesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 488
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsmissing puzzlesdots
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    the once gentle creatures
    lush about the mirrors
    stolen moments feeding children
    and their like
    they are blue within these,
    pale shadows breathe the morning doves,
    broken sparrows rebounding the loosened sky
    the lazy passersby recoil in plush labor
    at the coming hours of the day
    the landscapes within the endless seconds
    unseen
    because they are merely oblivious graves
    to dodge

    i lap the passing city like a folding flower,
    dance the boulevard,
    a shout from danger
    yet these are the early moments,
    creeping beasts remain in wait
    sailing dreamy travelled sleeps,
    my course an eccentric gasp,
    i lash the gritty pavement with my teeth
    while street kids ornament my wake

    the world is blind to me
    as i've slipped into the most minute
    the place in between the rivers
    where i stalk the lions mouth
    and i feel like glass here,
    the point in which it melts
    i am the fluid passing
    of leaves and warmth
    i am the summers breath

    it began as some things must
    trivial and unannounced
    a parade of chiming pilgrims
    round about
    i noticed the world turn agape and velvet
    i an island amongst the amused crowds,
    ant preachers and toll-taggers
    i was alone in the shifting air
    while reality opened a hurricane around me
    my teeth relaxed
    as I moved
    forward and ahead

    i am the soft brushing of lips in this
    the ghost of solitude and feathers

    i speak of nonform
    what i have witnessed as i fade away
    in the place
    where fog and fingers mingle
    i've seen the death of worlds inside me,
    the treachery of children
    the blinding of loves best friend
    innocence
    please permit the clashing of my moments
    my time is the movement
    of the deep wood

    as a child i lounged about
    the gentle touch-me-nots
    neath a collage of willow whispers
    with the sweet humming
    of the summer lawns
    my bed
    this is where i keep my inner heart
    in that place of fearful flowers,
    the movement of gaudy clouds above
    like storms brewing
    in the eyes of angels

    it was in this time
    that i would come to be everything
    and how i learned to be what i am now
    the mystery of the world
    is that you can not see me

    the vibrating air
    sings my body awake
    i am an ancient clatter
    and i ask the crowds where they hide their friends
    and the missing puzzles of my mind
    that we can move as rivers do
    out of sight and back within
    a phantom of deciet
    a miracle of sunlight
    love is another country,
    passion another continent
    you and i are the lost world
    our time together
    was a forgotten frontier

    let me move the mountains
    from your path my dear
    and create a new place
    for you to rest your tired eyes
    upon my chest
    lovely in the afternoon singing




    Submitted on 2007-06-05 22:09:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love these images you've given my hungry mind :)
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by flyfire | [ Reply to This ]


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