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    dots Submission Name: The Dentist Visitdots
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    Author: eener
    ASL Info:    21/f/wi
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 351/370/53
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 729
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1254



    Description:
       *sung to the tune of "Sadie Hawkins Dance" by Relient K, with some of the same lines*
    *must be sung wearing a Hershey's sweater*

    I haven't been on here in such a long time. I just wanted to post this because it's the first parody of sorts that I've ever written. I got a cleaning today at the dentist and I visited Hershey, Pennsylvania two weeks ago, and so this is just a piece of fun. I dare you to sing it...I dare you.


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    dotsThe Dentist Visitdots
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    The dental assistant at my side talking
    About which tooth may need some new caulking
    My ears were burning but I kept on gawking
    Chocolate in my bag and a craving a' knocking

    (Chorus:)
    Anger's Antithesis
    In every Hershey Kiss
    There's nothing better
    oh oh oh
    A mini dream come true
    At every avenue
    There's nothing better
    Baby, do you like my sweater?

    Sitting in the chair of my nemesis dreading
    Laid back, got cleaned, waited for the ending
    Learned that another tooth needs some mending
    Got a stern word about the last dead nerve-ending

    (Chorus)

    Ran out the door from that harsh seating
    Popped a Truffle Kiss in to soothe the bleeding
    My man lectured me on tooth brush heeding
    I said that's one thing I won't be needing
    An empty wallet is enough persuasion
    To end my stubborn tooth brush evasion
    So that I can afford my asphyxiation
    So that I can afford my asphyxiation...

    Chocolaty veins...running smooth
    I'm so addicted to this sugary groove!

    (Chorus)

    (Chorus)




    Submitted on 2007-06-05 22:10:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Haha eener. You always did love the sweets. My dentist is pretty good, but I hate going to see that owly eyed [censored] even still. I look at him and I see pain. And I see my wallet empty. And the receptionists don't even accept cash which is absurd? You have time to brush your teeth and lecture me about brushing my teeth, but you don't have the time to pick your fat ass up and waltz across the street to make a bank deposit?
    Damn

    MyX
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]


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