i dunno.
i think you lost your groove and in the end it became all about fu.cking and nothing about cultural differences/repercussions.
you have hints of my cross cultural relationship experiences... lips are different and so are tastes that made simply kissing seem so foreign and exciting
personally i do not think your 3 lines per stanza aided your message any. i think it stunted the pace and had each stanza sound/feel like a completely separate idea instead of a continuation of the one before. i think this piece should be picking up pace and being some kind of... list of the pro's of cross cultural relationships...a pace building to some kind of climax...
maybe that is why the end seems so shallow... because there is no urgency in the want/need... there doesnt seem to be anything behind the words at all...
i dunno.
i think you could prolly have done this better.
it was.... wow ... i really liked it... i didnt understand some parts but they were nice enough to let them just flow over me.. i loved the imagery and the hazyness of everything, it could all mean so much and yet means so little to one person and so much to another...
A hopeful caress
Applied to a burnished thigh
Brings distant seas to swell
this was wonderful...truely brings out the magic and need of and for lust
Submission Name: Cultural Repercussions 
