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Just so Confessions

Author: kittycampbel
ASL Info:    23 male uganda
Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 53 /72 /25
Words: 249
Class/Type: Prose /Love
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Just so Confessions

A story about you and me
Is what I relate
I have but loved the whole world
In my simple heart and mind
I feel the Game is over,
The time is up!
Time to reconcile myself with the right morals
That must make a man

I needed a woman that had it all.
Am kinda a perfectionist
Somebody told me once
'Hope you find what yo lookin' for'
I kinda see it in your eyes
The woman I have always longed for
I always treasure this first impression,
It's always a rosy moment
smiles playing from ear to another silently
with a great deal of trust in each others' eye
It always makes me realize
How much strength my heart has
when It comes to loving someone else

You just help me believe,
It's love I have for you!
I don' wanna die of un dying lust
You just have to make me believe in myself
When no body else can help.
I have a dream!
This Dream is you!! Diana!!

I'm sitted like Joseph the little dreamer boy
In a fantasy of what I see so real
Thinking of your pretty face, beautiful you.
I'm gonna let the whole world know
If you let me!!!

If you cant say anything back, just shout back Call me anything! A fool! hmm!?


Submitted on 2007-06-06 03:27:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  some lady you like bro? well said. don't want to die of undying lust?

How much strength my heart has
when It comes to loving someone else

so it makes me thing what about love for your self?

overall. poetry.
| Posted on 2007-06-10 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
  over all its not bad. the feeling i there and for any piece to great you must have both inspiration and enthusiam. glance over this and revise and you'd have a great representation of your feelings which are merely hinted at. you have an ability of using great description which leads to imagery. work on this again plz, id like to see how it turns out.
| Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]

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