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    dots Submission Name: Would You Give Me (unfinished)dots
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    Author: shannanigan
    ASL Info:    21 Female
    Elite Ratio:    3.48 - 47/61/14
    Words: 20
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 841
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 145



    Description:
       trying to use all five senses to ask for something.


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    dotsWould You Give Me (unfinished)dots
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    just one look
    just a glance
    an open door
    another chance

    an honest word
    a sound reproof





    Submitted on 2007-06-06 05:03:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      at first glance i looked at the short poem you'd ubmitted and shook my head. but sometimes hort thoughts are sweet.

    your poem reminds me of that small smidgen of hope you may have when things are rough. just that small speck of light that makes you think there might be hope at the end.

    the strength of a small bit hope, that chance of second chance, is a quality which can lead to the greatest events in history.
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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