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    dots Submission Name: redemptiondots
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    Author: darkestlight
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    That silent scream
    I am a whisper in the wind
    I used to be a different me
    Now all I have is shattered dreams
    These moments are bleak
    My future is dark
    I have nothing left for tomorrow
    I am ready to change
    Is it too late?
    There was a choice
    I let it go
    My life is a broken road
    And now I am chasing time
    Trying to redeem myself




    Submitted on 2007-06-06 05:55:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      haha, i once wrote a poem almost too much like it.
    it used all the same terms :

    silent scream
    shattered dreams
    broken road
    chasing time..etc.

    and i was kind of going through an awkward change.
    so uhm..apparently this piece is nothing new to me at all, especially since i wrote one just like it.
    i totally know what you're going through and if you say you're ready to change, then your change is on your way and be patient.
    good luck.
    Peace<3

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    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      deafening silence... that is something I have heard of.

    You took off well, but like you mentioned, the impact was lost like in 'having no future'.

    Strive towards building power in to this and you will see that even depressive thoughts are stronger than the positive ones




    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]


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