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    dots Submission Name: I'm losing itdots

    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 304
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    Verse 1

    I woke up 4 a.m you're on my mind,
    I cant seem to sleep if I'm thinking bout you all the time.

    I keep asking myself why the hell am I still here,
    Cuz all the feelings I have wont disappear.

    But if its a case where you can change the one you love,
    I'll be over you in a flash,
    I'm moving on there's nothing left for me here


    You need to give me back my feelings,
    All my "I love you's" I need them,
    I need my space,
    I need my freedom,
    Cuz I'm losing it.
    I'm taking back all my letters,
    That I wrote to make it better,
    In fact it would make it a whole lot better,
    Cuz I'm losing it.

    Verse 2

    I'm lying awake cuz I wont go back to sleep,
    Thinkin bout all the times when you made me feel incomplete,
    But honestly I'm just getting a little tired of this,
    And all the time your face seems to still exist.
    Now I know that you cant help the person that you love,
    But it hurts to know what we could have been,
    What we could have been.....



    But someday,
    When your calling out for me,
    I wont be there to hold you tight,
    I hope its hurting you to know,
    Without you I'm alright,
    But its the little things in life,
    Like just calling in the nights.....
    Just to make sure your baby is alright.

    " You need to give me back my feelings.....",
    " All those memories you can keep them...",

    I'm taking back all my letters,
    That I wrote to make it better,
    I'm trying to change tomorrows weather,
    Cuz I'm losing it.


    Submitted on 2007-06-06 07:16:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice flow. Lacks the uniqueness factor. A love song? Oh, how un-heard of!
    Although, songs don't really have to be so complex. They just have to have a good tune. But hey, it's simple, to the point and flows nicely.
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by AteMyBackpack | [ Reply to This ]

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