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    dots Submission Name: Dualitydots
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    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       Feelings lost...


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    dotsDualitydots
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    Their breath is silence,
    In moments tender.
    Forget the violence,
    That used to tempt her.
    Forget the sin,
    That makes her feel...
    When time, within
    your heart's a seal.

    Their thought- ignorance.
    Your words - a key.
    Zeitgeist in Florence
    Freedom will be -
    Of spirit, religion, and time of dust -
    You'll have to teach them -
    Of life and lust...
    But understanding - seldom.

    Their feelings - empty,
    Your world's a river.
    The waves that will be -
    Cold ice, dark shiver.
    You used to know,
    What's real or not.
    But rivers flow...
    Is all you've got.




    Submitted on 2007-06-06 12:52:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. others may not but i do. i really like the pictures you tried to paint and the metaphors. very nice. keep posting. you are good at what you do....





    tina
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      umm i'm not perfectly sure on what this is trying to say here, but i loved the rhyme scheme you used. i could tell you worked hard on this.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this.
    i've always loved the ways you put things together to write.
    i really liked how you formatted it in incomplete sentences and replaced it all with dashes and hyphens.
    i think it makes poetry itself a lot more dramatic and creative and gives it a different kind of effect.
    i really liked the metaphors and just the whole scenerio i got from it.
    great work, like usual.
    Peace<3


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    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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