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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsLovedots
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    Now true love will sure take us
    To realms unguessed and vast.
    Down in the great seaís sea foam,
    There in the oceanís sea dome,
    A wizard sought to break us,
    Our love was cruelly cast.
    Now true love will sure take us
    To realms unguessed and vast.

    Our love won out to save us,
    For who might work us ill?
    For when we are together,
    Our hearts float like some feather,
    And those who would enslave us
    Their plans will come to nil.
    Our love won out to save us,
    For who might work us ill?

    With oak our ship is builded,
    And joined with pegs of steel,
    The canvas laced with sewing,
    Takes breezes gently blowing,
    On tall masts fluted, gilded,
    As we both man the wheel.
    With oak our ship is builded,
    And joined with pegs of steel.

    So we cast off to sojourn
    Unto the furthest clime,
    Across the sea we welter,
    In search of perfect shelter,
    That we might not return
    And stand outside of Time.
    So we cast off to sojourn
    Unto the furthest clime!





    Submitted on 2007-06-06 18:04:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh this was real superb, Michael,

    A real enjoyable write that flowed so smoothly......................................and very interestingly done, I loved the rgyme scheme............................a lot of thought put in here and again, a wonderful idea.......................

    The poem had that kind of thrill that always comes with adventure within the lines that made one feel like reading on and on.

    Good Effort! : )

    Great Write! : )



    | Posted on 2007-06-22 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      it was a great poem! I really loved it...I hope whoever your writing about has read this because if they do, they will surly fall even more in love with you! really sweet and great writing!
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by Pri | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. I think a lot of people who are in love will relate to it a lot. Keep posting. You are a good writer. I enjoy your work. Ihope to read more by you soon.



    NICE YODA



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    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      neat! cross between Lochinvar and Rime of The Ancient Mariner. the wording is similar to the latter, and the feel and theme to the former; although im not sure if you would agree on this. i like it!
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by esoterica | [ Reply to This ]


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