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    dots Submission Name: ice princessdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 509
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1085



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    dotsice princessdots
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    last night
    in deamy clouds of travelled sleep
    i blew smoke rings of sage and vanilla
    at the legendary ice princess of my heart

    in between each one was a silver rose
    plucked from the stones of vahalla
    and a bouquet of black feathers
    taken from the seams of my thunderfold hair

    golden lovely girl of ice
    i adore you
    wait for me
    though we've faded,
    i am still your storm
    of gathering light unbound
    we've merely lost ourselves
    in the dramas of the day

    nothing separates one thing
    from another
    more than the finite infinities of eternal wisdom

    the trivial masterpieces of life are our sure signs
    that we're merely
    learning the same lessons
    to simply pass the time

    power exists that topples worlds
    and rebuilds them
    in a trinity of wonder

    we have the power to create everything
    as things cannot
    as things must
    unfold




    Submitted on 2007-06-07 01:04:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like your use of specific colors and scents. "smoke rings of sage and vanillia" "golden lovely girl"

    I really enjoyed reading this piece of writing,
    though it may be a bit easier to read if you added some puncuation so it would flow a little better when read,
    but even without it, I thought that this was well written.
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by autumnflame | [ Reply to This ]


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