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    dots Submission Name: Disguise...dots
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    Author: StylerDen
    ASL Info:    29/Male/Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 38/59/51
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dotsDisguise...dots
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    I see demons in disguise,
    with their fake angelic wings
    And their injustice evil eyes...




    Submitted on 2007-06-07 06:53:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Lark. The piece is all too abrupt and incomplete. It is a great opening for something bigger.
    | Posted on 2007-06-08 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      more! i mean if it's just meant to be a comment then cool but your robbing me hear damnit! lol wooo!
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]


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