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    dots Submission Name: Blind Dog IIdots
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    Author: Derrick Thomas
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 21/59/39
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       Sometimes good stuff comes from my brain, but apparently now it has diarrhea, because everything my brain is shooting out resembles warm liquid rhyming shit.


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    dotsBlind Dog IIdots
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    I thought I was awake.
    Damn these eyes,
    the world I saw was fake.
    Imagine the surprise
    when I woke up.
    Damn these eyes
    for making me think that I could see.
    Fuck you,
    fuck him,
    The blind dog is me.




    Submitted on 2007-06-07 10:20:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      also it makes me sad, but it is a good extension, and there's nothing wrong with rhyming on occasion

    xoxox
    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      having had the first one explained to me more in depth, i think that this is somehow you realizing that perhaps you were blind to things about or of her then, but you have been enlightened now, i think....

    xoxox
    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      well you know what I think, you are the most insightful blind dog Ive eva eva seenid
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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