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    dots Submission Name: Blind Dog III - Explorations in Unseen Landsdots

    Author: Derrick Thomas
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 21/59/39
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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       Its hard to see when your eyes are closed. Someone put the blind dog back in the fucking pen, I grow tired of him.

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    dotsBlind Dog III - Explorations in Unseen Landsdots

    The blind dog looked upon his people, watching them toil about endlessly. His exploration of this unseen hell was over. He was tired, dog tired.

    The pile of wood kept getting bigger and bigger. The blind dog barked, ordering his people to keeping piling on the lumber.

    "More wood!"

    Too long had they been in this land. Their marbles rolled off the deck and into the sea when the boat capsized. His former friends now regarded him as a god. The blind dog couldn't understand why they couldn't see. He just wanted escape. He told them it was time to burn god, and everyone obeyed. All the men and children stumbled around, exhausted, but still the blind dog barked.

    "More wood!"

    After seventeen days, the blind dog surveyed the pile and saw that it was well. He climbed to the top and barked.

    "Light the fire!"

    His time in this land was done. Damn the explorations, it was time for quick escape. (The fire raged on.) The men and children began to scream. They thought they were burning god, but they were really just burning themselves. The blind dog continued to bark, but no one could hear him anymore. Everyone was dead to him. Blood flowed through the forest and through the dogs veins. There was no escape. His hands turned blue and he slept.

    Pain had no sympathy.

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       He just wanted escape. He told them it was time to burn god, and everyone obeyed.

    i loved this line.. it made me all thought-y and such

    i think this is possibly about the elevation of one that is hurt to a divine level, and then he tired of the great and tiresome adoration

    this is about the end of an era, a feeling, a part of life, or a whole life

    it is deep, and it is beautiful
    and i hope that this is not true
    for the terribly beautiful is still excriciatingly terrible

    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      this one makes me tired Drrick, and I like this line...I think it is clever:

    His exploration of this unseen hell was over. He was tired, dog tired.
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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