when i saw the title i thought of franz kafka 'a cage went in search of a bird'
i dont know whether you wrote this with double spacing on purpose or whether it just happened but i dont think it adds anything to your piece at all.
if anything it makes it harder to read because concentration is stretched and therefore the meaning of the words is semi lost... well it is for me anyways...
i think you should also think about adding a little punctuation in here... seperate phrases and ideas a little better.
maybe you could flesh this out some.
you have a couple of vague ideas in here that could be so much more. that you could create into more concrete images to paint a better picture for the reader to gain more perspective and understanding.
Reminders of all thatís lost
what is it that has been lost...?
is it recoverable? findable?
elaborate a little more...
i guess... for me... i walk away from this piece thinking "at least the caged bird sings..."
in the movie breakfast at tiffanys the main character is a girl who hardly has anything in her apartment but one thing she does have is a stuffed bird in a cage... i guess singing is better than stuffed... even if only minimally
this title at first made me thinl of maya angelou...
yet this is a much different thing.
te imagery and all i think from the first line mentioning 'jury' created an image of a smal;l delicate girl, sinking into the seat of the witness stand. a lawyer questioning her on events that have upheaved her life, and she whispering the answers...the truth becoming known.