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    dots Submission Name: Circles WithIn circlesdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 546
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 751



    Description:
       I'm going to open mic @ Cozmic Cafe tonight - a new piece I thought of reading - the symbols <@> used in the writing out are not exactly related here

    love,peace,joy,laughs & smiles to share



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    dotsCircles WithIn circlesdots
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    Circles
    withIN
    circles (8)

    Middle-of-nowhere
    sky night
    Reveal to me
    your curvatures (~)

    Moving spots
    of Light
    Reflections
    of
    Being (69)

    Darknes
    &
    Day
    a vibrating
    ray (~*~)

    Encompassing
    All
    &
    NothINg
    EverythIng (<--->)

    As a note,
    bridge,
    song
    to sing (o/~)

    Cozmic
    symphonies
    beaming
    epiphanies (/* " ! #~)

    All of BeINg
    lives on
    in you
    Circles
    within
    circles
    is the clue (%)







    Submitted on 2007-06-07 17:19:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The word concentric comes to mind as I read this. It's the way we
    set up drum circles, so the participants can send smiles across the air, so the community begins to breathe on its own. There is a panoramic view of everyone so it all works to make the world around us closer.

    And this is a cool vision to share with us. I'm just happy you are doing so well and living your dream.

    Only one thing I tripped on Tiff and that's the use of "on, in,"
    together. I don't think you need on. Just state it like this:

    All of being
    lives in you.

    Nice work it's good to read what you're doing right now.

    Love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Circle within circles is a great symbol... of all creation, of the way universe works , the complexity of our lives... this is so profound...

    Cozmic
    symphonies
    beaming
    epiphanies

    This is a wonderful piece.... inspiring!!!!

    Very well done, dear epiphany...

    All the best,
    parul.





    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      Circles signs and words abound
    Explaining old and new
    I feel that this is yet another
    Masterpiece from you.

    PHP.
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      cosmic symphonies!

    I love the word cosmic, it makes me feel like a hippie whenever I say it. Whenever I feel like a hippie, I want to dance and wear tie-dye clothes and tan leather jackets with fringes and those little round, colored glasses. I would never smoke pot though. No matter how great the hippie influence.

    cosmic symphonies!

    This is wonderful. Circles with circles. I don't know why (or maybe I do), but the first thing I thought of was nipples. But now, it could be the ripples of a pond or a dartboard. I'm naughty.

    Love your cosmic poems! HIPPIE TIME!
    | Posted on 2007-06-08 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the little symbols and good luck at open mic. woot woot. i cheer for you girl.


    tina
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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