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    Author: black_beauty18
    ASL Info:    25/Female/Hutchinson, KS
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 153/146/46
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 721
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       I don't know... I'm upset... So I wrote...


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    I need to wash my hands and purify my soul,
    Sin has taken me and left my life lightless and dull.
    I don't know what to do to turn my life around,
    I don't know what to do to get my feet on solid ground.
    I turn to God, but I feel guilty when I pray,
    I don't know why God would want to hear what I say.
    I wish I knew what God put me here for,
    I can't figure it out, and I can't be here anymore.
    I want to go somewhere where I can't hurt the ones I love,
    I wish I could escape myself because I've had enough.
    I put everything I have into living my double life,
    I'm too tired to keep it up, I wish everything would be alright.
    I know I'm not worthy but I need to escape,
    I want to straighten out before it's too late.




    Submitted on 2007-06-07 20:09:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have expressed the dilemma all of us face as sinners in a fallen world. You are certainly not alone in feeling as you do. Yet it is because of God's grace and mercy, we do not have to feel defeated and afraid to approach God.

    The tomb is empty. Death has no hold on anyone who believes in Him.

    Good write.
    | Posted on 2007-06-08 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      Im not into the God scene..
    But I think this is a pretty awesome poem.
    Short and sweet.
    A Lot of people, who have had rough times, turn to religion, as a sort of saving themselves..
    But, who knows they may be..
    A lot of people can relate to the words you have writen,
    from the very begining,
    to the very end.
    Most people try to drag things out, thats why this one is soo well written..
    Keep it up!! I like it already!
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]


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