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    dots Submission Name: You Never See Beautydots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This annoyed me less than anything else I found in my notebook today.


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    dotsYou Never See Beautydots
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    You never see beauty in abstraction,
    in imperfection.
    I think you'd prefer
    a black and white world
    of perfect circles and right angles
    to the forms and colors
    of ocean sunsets and trees,
    and a naked woman
    could be built like a cardboard box
    and still serve the purpose,
    for humans are never perfect,
    and no matter how beautiful a woman is,
    you make love with the lights off
    rather than see her flaws
    or face your own.




    Submitted on 2004-06-16 03:44:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Holy $hit. I'm reading along thinking yeah, yeah, yeah and then
    "Or face your own"
    and wham, right in the face. Like a truck you never saw coming. And I have the same feelings, only about myself, wondering about what I refuse to see in myself. Very powerful, very damning.
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of Hercule Poirot. He would never face his flaws either
    On a more serious note, the more time I spend in this world, the more I am convinced of what the fox told The Little Prince.
    Enjoyed this 'least annoying' very much!
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel sorry for this person. beauty is everywhere you look, if you just open your eyes to it! and the part about the woman as a cardboard box made me laugh, and yet it seems so typical of many guys. this poor person has a hard time steppin' "out of the box," as it were! lol! it is the imperfection of the world that creates unique beauty. write on, amy!
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this to me is a true description of a perfectionist that is too afraid to realize thier own flaws and is too busy noticing others. great write! it speaks the truth about how our world is today in a sense. my favorite line had to be :

    You make love with the lights off
    Rather than see her flaws
    Or face your own

    that was great!

    beautiful write!
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i would have to agree with sharky no one is perfect but when you truely love someone, they become perfect. good write lia
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem very much. it's very well written. a perfect world would be very boring. but I have the feeling that the line 'You make love with the lights off' is kind of odd. for me after there's a preposition missing after love (maybe 'to'?). but you are the english tutor.
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful! I love it's oval shape - heh heh, sorry - that's the first thing that comes to mind. But its truth without simplicity. my fave : "And a naked woman
    Could be built like a cardboard box"
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by Bee | [ Reply to This ]
      Systematic damning of the limited in scope.
    Or is it pity?
    Reads like a diatribe but there's enough reason in there to soften it up.
    And that makes it just right.
    | Posted on 2004-06-16 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... the end is so like OMG didnt see that coming! completely speechless... awesome write! but like when you are in love you kinda dont see all their flaws... i guess thats the whole "love is blind" thing but yeah... awesome write all the same!
    | Posted on 2004-06-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      It would seem that you do not see the beauty in abstraction either, or you would leave the lights on. You're simply deluding yourself of the flaws rather than seeing them as beauty. I prefer to do it with the lights on most of the time.
    | Posted on 2004-06-17 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome Amy! (Tractor missed the point methinks. --you are speaking to a guy to be sure--but about his making love to HER--not you! I find it interesting that some take this comment box as poll to vote for light on or off also lol)) I loved the twist at the end ,--a perfect ending to another original, thoughtful write. I loved the cardboard box bit--and it's vastly more tasteful than the Paper Bag cliché . Why is it that some people don't see the unique beauty and charm of the imperfect world---God--there is so much MORE to enjoy on this big smorgasbord --unless you have created a limited menu for yourself of only fare that meets your own limited taste. These people will be the lonely ones if they don't soon learn to take life as it comes, and enjoy the ride...EERIENCE it all, the good, the bad and the ugly. Silver ( I like this one--can you tell??)
    | Posted on 2004-06-18 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      EERIENCE ?? wonder why it turned out that way with the PO'd little icon..must be the
    xp experience...anyway you know what i meant>
    Silver
    | Posted on 2004-06-18 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]


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