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    dots Submission Name: Good Enough?dots
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    Author: Wired
    Elite Ratio:    7.76 - 21/11/16
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Does someone who doesn't need anybody at all need somebody?


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    dotsGood Enough?dots
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    So you are left behind.
    Obligations ignored again.
    And yet, you come out ahead...

    Fathering a child
    or being a father
    The difference is tremendous.

    You walk the path unguided
    save the malicious ramblings
    of your other source of life.

    Somehow, there is a bright side
    even to this thoughtless abandonment.
    It is a rare gift.

    Unguided, you define yourself.
    Unmoulded, you came to be who you are.
    You alone discovered what you are made of.

    I found you somewhere...
    in the middle of your journey
    I was fascinated and infatuated.

    Would you allow me,
    as you travel through life,
    to be your companion?

    Am I good enough to deserve you?
    Would you open your heart
    after you discovered your ability?

    To make it on your own...
    To be completely nonpartisan,
    and totally self-reliant.

    Could you love me anyway?




    Submitted on 2007-06-08 14:40:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww..hun. Your sooo sweet, and I will always LOVE you... and I have yet to define who I am completely and I hope that you can be there to show me the way when I may become lost or upset.. I hope you are always there for me to hold and confurt me when needed...hope we can always be there for one another equally..:) you make me happy and always will i hope you will always know this :-*

    ~!*jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-06-08 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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