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    dots Submission Name: Balance Betweendots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 610
    Class/Type: Story/Satire
    Total Views: 706
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3609



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    dotsBalance Betweendots
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    Theodore LoveingOOD, a small flower at the foot of the hill, felt a sweltering drop of humidity in the relatively thick air. With her head tilted to the heavens, she drank in the silly droplets that clumsily fell from the sky. Above her, the moon smiled. In the distance of the universe a storm threatened to rage. Round and round went small currents of negative energy , untill they found their way pleasantly resting on a blade of grass beside of Miss LovingOOD.

    "How do you do?" Went the first thread of confrontation.

    "Oh not very good at all, dear lovely flower..." Replied the energy,"Your petals are blocking all of my light. I'm afraid I will be lacking quite intensly of my vitamin D."

    Miss LovingOOD observed her position in the field at the bottom of the hill. The energy waited for her to reply to him, in vain, because at one he was swept away and transferred into a lady bug that was headed quickly up the hill to a couple of picnicers. The ladybug landed on a red and white blanket and waited.

    "Oh look down there, darling, that flower, I think I shall pick her for a charm in my straw hat!"

    "That wouldn't do I am afraid." Said one of the two.

    "Not very well at all, don't you know, that is Miss Theo LovingOOD and she has grown in that particular spot for so very long. To mover her may be disasterous, she keeps the negative energy from recieving his vitamin D...without it he cannot very well continue on, she is what keeps this world in a balance." Said one of the two to the other one.

    THe other one looked down the hill, pondered the reasoning of the second and spoke again, "What if we were to pollinater her, just go right down there and take a seed for my garden, what good we would be doing in doing that deed today!"

    The second could not see anything harmful in this plan, only positively reviewed this action.
    THe couple of picnicers walked in sync with one another down the hill.

    "Hello, Miss LovinGOOD. If it is okay with you, might I take a seed or two for our garden?"

    "I'm terribly sorry that my petals are in your way." Responded Miss LovinGOOD. (She was a bit shy of reasonable intelligence.)

    The couple looked at one another.

    "No dear," said the one"Might we have a small seed to sew in our garden?"

    "Hmmmmm?"

    "A seed, can we have a seed?"

    "Are you looking for something then?" Miss LovinGOOD batted her eyelashes prettily as she asked this question.

    "Let's just go before the ants interupt our picnic." Said the second of the two.


    The one gently bent down and took a seed from Miss Theo LovinGOOD and went to walk away.

    "Oh that was not very nice, then dear, all you had to do was ask if you wanted one of my seeds, oh well take it then...and hopefully you could do some good with that."

    And so the couple went up the hill, the one with a seed and the second toting the picnic blankey and basket. Inside the basket, the ladybug hitched a ride so that he may have an oppurtunity to reproduce later on that day.

    And so the desires of all was to carry on the balance between Miss LovinGOOD and the ladybug, otherwise known to the universe as negative energy.




    Submitted on 2007-06-08 18:03:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, I personally like this mound of sewage.

    I think it's clever.

    And deep.
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Garbage. Why is this even under Satire? Concludes nothing. Undeservedly overwrought. Your attempt at making some sort of a final, grand sweeping statement is incredibly trite. Actually, I'm getting angry at even remembering that I read this mound of sewage
    | Posted on 2007-06-12 00:00:00 | by John Jay Junior | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting and a wonderful perspective of relation. That the rules of the universe are this poetic and truly simple is the great misunderstood mystery indeed.

    A refreshing read! Thank you!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice narrative, enjoyed it a lot, particularly the description spoken with childlike innocent simplicity.... will like to read what happens next..

    All the best,
    parul.
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]


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