Awww this is soo sweet! Wonderful poem. Thanks for commenting on mine: Beauty in the Dark. It was something that actually happened to me and the question...how to get passed what you've missed...it was talking about things i know i've missed with my best friend.
i like this i can relate to it.. sorry im not a critic i feel that everyone has their own style and i dont feel right telling someone how to write like a lot of people (and im not meaning this towards you lol).... people sometimes say actions speak louder than words... well, i think this poem counteracts that
I kind of already have a tune in my head. This is great. I love this. I've read through a lot of your stuff and it is all really good. You put a lot of thought into what you write and most of it is well written. You have skill. Do something with it bigger than a poetry site. I don't know who you wrote this for but I can tell that you love him. Not to pry, but what happened. You are an artist. I feel like I wish you would write for me just so I could show off your work. I would love someone to love me enough to put me in one of thier pieces of art. Like a master painter, you have perfected writing, almost. With this piece, I see no flaws. It amazes me that there are people out there like you. You encourage me to try harder so that I may be as skilled as you. Continue on your mission to become better but I feel that you have already succeeded. Beautifully written, wonderfully read.