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    dots Submission Name: Despairdots

    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       ABAAB format;eight syllables per line.

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    Invest the darkness of your doubt
    beneath this thinly-masked disguise;
    from hot beds, demon-seeds will sprout
    to curse all light, then snuff it out,
    and irritate your blinded eyes.

    Who purged into the stagnant pond,
    this cesspool of your dreaded fears?
    A great stain scores its surface bond
    'cross tepid waters, well beyond
    the point of dumping, through the years.

    A black door looms within the mind.
    Its shadow cast across your soul.
    What terrors have been shut behind,
    you dared not open up to find,
    for fear of losing all control.

    This hollowed hole and burrowed bed,
    no comforter could ease the chill.
    An ugly shroud adorns your head
    to mask the fact you have been dead;
    this testament, your stubborn will.

    A deeper drop down pity’s pit,
    the shaming shackles blame and bind.
    Depression drones the tune to wit
    O, pining needles, needless knit,
    picked locks of hairs, bald hopes can't find.

    The Gadfly

    Submitted on 2007-06-09 03:30:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You are an amazing writer. This poem really connected to me. It was beautiful and magnificently written. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Raxor
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this poem. The flow was excellent, the entire piece was a very smooth read and easy to follow. I admit, I read it at least a few times in a row. Once I started reading, I couldn't stop.
    The vocabulary is excellent as well. You have a wonderful way with words, keep up the great writing!
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by DontxSurrender | [ Reply to This ]
      An answer to my prayers :)

    this is like a reply that i needed for my post "Disguise", i like it all in general, not a single para is a fave, bt the whole thing makes it even better.

    Its going in to my fave collection for sure :)

    Thanks for the amazing lines!!

    God Bless bro,
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by StylerDen | [ Reply to This ]

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