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    dots Submission Name: Gratitudedots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsGratitudedots
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    A fertile pod bursts
    in spores of gratitude
    exploding in joy
    and thankfullness.

    A pebble cast,
    makes a splash into the deepness.
    Warmth expanding in rings
    into infinity
    attracts like for like
    and suprises me with a deep kiss.

    Heart flows out once again.

    In and out like waves upon the sea.

    Toss a grain of sand from the shore
    into embracing wholeness.

    Feel a whole beach arise under your feet.




    Submitted on 2007-06-09 10:09:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a cool piece with simple piece of advice hurled into our awareness in a grain of sand.

    Just one thing I see that looks different to me, but that is up to you, of course.

    Toss a grain of sand from the shore
    upon embracing wholeness
    feel a whole beach arise under your feet.

    I broke the line a bit differently and changed "into" to upon
    dropped the "and" at the beginning of the last line.

    This reminds me of the critical mass idea, hmmm are we sending messages we don't know about?

    Love it,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2007-09-03 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting naturalist piece you got here.. reminds me very much of haikus... although clearly a haiku this is not.

    nature is something awe-inspiring.. i had the chance of witnessing one of its many and delicate glories.. far from my home, i beheld a temperate rainforest.. and it was mighty humbling and i was grateful for every tiny event that lead me there. we are like the pebbles and grains you write about.


    keep it green.


    peace.


    -pietro
    | Posted on 2007-08-28 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is very gracious in gratitude and I love when I am in nature and can feel a sisterhood with all that is around me and appreciate "IT", in gratitude, for "ALL" "IT" is.

    When we stop looking at our environment in a contradictory way and see "IT" for exactly what we are we will live in balance.

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, i like this! such gratitude for nature and embracing her beauty. your first strophe is beautiful, an image of the pod bursting to life with joy at simply living.

    you seem one with the ocean, with the tide's flow, and that is as it should be. it's all connected, we're all connected with nature.

    wonderful closing lines. i feel the joy, the embracing, and the sweet feeling on the sands of the beach on my feet.

    bene!

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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