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    dots Submission Name: Completely Emptydots

    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 539
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       For every time me and my dad joked around. For every best friend who destroyed me. For every time depression rolled on and cover me like a dark blanket. Emptyness filled my body. And silence spoke how much I loved you.

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    dotsCompletely Emptydots

    Completely empty.
    Nothing fills and nothing excapes.
    The only thing capable of going out is tears.
    Tears of pain.
    Tears of love.
    Tears of hurt.
    one moment she was there.
    Now she's gone.

    Completely empty.
    Desperate to feel.
    So numb that only pain brings feeling.
    Not sure of what is wanted.
    To be told your nothing.
    That your life is worthless.
    Then turn around and speak those words.

    Completely empty.
    Searching for nothing.
    And everything.
    At appearance she seems put together.
    Inside she's busted.

    Comletely Empty.

    Submitted on 2007-06-09 13:22:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like how deeply personal this poem is, everyone can relate to this empty feeling that puts you in agony. There are a few misspelling in there that should be fixed and the pace seems awkward but good job!
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by SuperEdgar | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this piece. and i love your picture. where did it come from??? i dont know. this is a good piece. to be told you are worthless is disturbing. it fu<ks with a persons head. there sould. i odnt like it. ive had it said to me but ive always thought of something ive given that person that they needed. comtinue to write. you are good at it. everyoneis empty sometimes

    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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