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    dots Submission Name: Little Thingsdots
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    Author: autumnflame
    ASL Info:    21/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.53 - 15/10/5
    Words: 381
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 183
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2330



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       I Miss You.


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    dotsLittle Thingsdots
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    It’s always those little things
    You miss the most.
    The things you take for granite,
    That you always seem to never notice.
    I wish I could have it now, if only for a second.

    It’s the things like the natural scent of his skin.
    Laying close and feeling the warmth of his body,
    the comfort of being wrapped tightly in his arms.
    Knowing that when you are there,
    nothing emotionally or physically can harm.

    It’s the things like watching his chest raise up and down as he breathes,
    and softly resting your head upon it.
    Listening solely to his beating heart.
    And you think of everything that makes him who he is
    Inside and out, and you never want him again to depart.

    It’s missing his soothing voice.
    The way he softly whispers “I love you” in your ear.
    Electricity running through your body and up your spine,
    As you feel his warm breathe on the back of your neck.
    You quiver, knowing the two of you are perfectly aligned.

    It’s the things like looking into his eyes.
    and for that instant,
    the whole world around you stops its motion,
    And you can’t think of anything else,
    But him and you, deep in love and devotion.

    And it’s in those moments,
    while gazing into his eyes,
    Makes you feel like you are completely whole.
    You feel as if you are but just one person.
    Two hearts, with one beat; two bodies, inhabiting one soul.

    It’s the things like missing the connection
    between two sweethearts.
    It’s the closeness I want to renew,
    to feel his presence again.
    To know that he is right there besides you.

    It’s being able to reach over and touch him.
    Simply lying next to one another.
    Lightly running your fingertips all over his body,
    memorizing, and loving every inch.
    Tasting his sweet lips, and living in rhapsody.

    It’s taking care of each other.
    Always there to give and receive needed comfort.
    It’s exploring this great big world together,
    Everything and anywhere.
    I wish we could live like that forever.

    Come Home Soon My Love.




    Submitted on 2007-06-09 16:40:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem is well written, with a good point and I loved the way you described the things in your poem....small, gentle things....
    'It's like watching his chest raise up and down as he breathes, and softly resting your head on it.'
    'lightly running your fingertips all over his body, memorizing, and loving, ever inch. Tasting his sweet lips, and living in rhapsody.'
    I think I found a few typos though, where you meant to say something else....
    in the third line, 'the things you take for granite,'
    was that supposed to be 'granted?'
    in the first line, third paragraph, is it rise up and down instead of raise?
    This is a wonderfully romantic piece, keep on writing about what you enjoy and love!
    best wishes -Katriana
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]
      That has got to be one of the best poems I've seen!

    I Love the strong, powerfull emotion that explodes from it!

    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by Roseyness | [ Reply to This ]



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