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    dots Submission Name: northern icedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Prose/
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    dotsnorthern icedots
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    in the sunfire green of early trees
    i stared into the empty branches
    where the birds once stood
    flowering their guilty feathers
    from the morning worms

    with the grass of my years
    around me
    & the marching insects
    of my love
    gnashing at the blades
    like knifes in my side
    even the swelling sky
    somehow adores me

    all these stars in breathy silent space,
    & i seem to orbit my own life
    with a sort of romantic astronomy
    while the lifelessness
    of some impermanent vacuity
    crowds around
    the endless layers of my heart

    yet in nature,
    where i'm born each day
    right after the moon goes to sleep
    or perhaps merely wakes up
    across a new horizon,
    i am glowing in a light
    that is the white
    & slow slipping of northern ice


    the healthy earth surrounds me
    & even in our sick
    we are somehow majestic
    in our most olive of skins




    Submitted on 2007-06-09 17:07:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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