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    dots Submission Name: I'm Like a Broken Toy.dots

    Author: save me
    ASL Info:    19/F
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 26/51/53
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsI'm Like a Broken Toy.dots

    Iím like a broken toy,
    No words are ever spoken,
    You pull my string to hear my voice,
    But it seems that I am broken.

    You put me down on a chair,
    And leave me while youíre gone,
    I feel so useless this is not fair,
    There is no use for me here.

    I wait and wait,
    For what seems like hours,
    And still no one appears.

    I hear your steps coming so close,
    And a bright light shines within me.
    I feel a sudden burst of hope,
    That maybe youíll still play with me.

    You pick me up,
    I feel so proud,
    That a toy which is broken,
    Can shine so loud,

    You take me to dark, dark place,
    And I begin to wonder,
    How can you play where you canít see?
    And then I feel the thunder.

    You hold me up,
    And look at me,
    Iím not quite sure of your actions.

    You take me vigorously,
    Then throw me down,
    I have no clue what happened.

    I want to burst into tears,
    For I was thrown away,
    Unfortunately all I am is a broken toy,
    That no longer can be used for play.

    Submitted on 2007-06-09 19:31:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you have so much potential... and you are so good as it is. check out some of my work. you remind me of how i wrote at your age. i was so confined by language. i really enjoyed this piece, but you're holding yourself back because life and words have a tendency to not make sense unless you let them and embrace their incoherence as beautiful.. Much luck, it gets better, i promise.
    | Posted on 2007-06-10 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]

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