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    dots Submission Name: My Little Secretdots

    Author: Priestess
    ASL Info:    21/female/usa
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 49/118/51
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1120
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Not my favorite poem, but please tell me what you think anyways.

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    dotsMy Little Secretdots

    My misery has been left unsaid
    But no one is to blame
    These insane thoughts that fill my head
    Would bring my family shame

    O how these thoughts torture me
    These thoughts inside my head
    I wish my mind was filled with glee
    Instead it's filled with dread

    I wish that I could sleep at night
    Without tears staining my cheek
    I wish inside I could be light
    But these tears make me feel weak

    I fear no one can comfort me
    My horrid wretched being
    I remain trapped in my misery
    And for now it will stay unseen

    So how do I express my agony?
    How do I express my pain?
    Through a simple thing called poetry
    And thats how I stay sane

    Submitted on 2007-06-09 19:47:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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