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My Little Secret

Author: Priestess
ASL Info:    21/female/usa
Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 49 /118 /51
Words: 148
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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Not my favorite poem, but please tell me what you think anyways.

My Little Secret

My misery has been left unsaid
But no one is to blame
These insane thoughts that fill my head
Would bring my family shame

O how these thoughts torture me
These thoughts inside my head
I wish my mind was filled with glee
Instead it's filled with dread

I wish that I could sleep at night
Without tears staining my cheek
I wish inside I could be light
But these tears make me feel weak

I fear no one can comfort me
My horrid wretched being
I remain trapped in my misery
And for now it will stay unseen

So how do I express my agony?
How do I express my pain?
Through a simple thing called poetry
And thats how I stay sane

Submitted on 2007-06-09 19:47:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  just wait, it gets better. i promise...
| Posted on 2007-06-10 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it alot. your style is invigorating.
| Posted on 2007-06-10 00:00:00 | by save me | [ Reply to This ]

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