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    dots Submission Name: Hopeless Messdots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsHopeless Messdots
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    A lost soul
    A broken heart
    Shattered dreams that fell apart

    Serenity, courage
    And wisdom gone
    Except the troubles i fell upon

    A hard past revealed
    And the visions i see
    Are just too brutal for you to believe

    The reflected image
    And the shoulder to cry
    Disappeared before me and left me to die




    Submitted on 2007-06-10 18:33:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. dae. that is all I can say right now I'm in aww with this piece.
    | Posted on 2007-06-11 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      first upon not apon and revealed not revieled. good work overall. this isnt a spelling contest anyways. i think i commented on some of your other work. you're name is familiar. but i comment all day to set example. continue to write. you are good at it. i look forward to reading more by you







    tina
    | Posted on 2007-06-10 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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