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    dots Submission Name: The Attempt of Suicidedots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
    Total Views: 808
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       for my great friend steven nicola

    R.I.P.
    sept. 11, 2006


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    dotsThe Attempt of Suicidedots
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    i miss you
    and i can't bare it
    why did you have to leave me?

    see what you did
    you hurt those that cared
    about you and the things you've done

    the path you took
    was the wrong way to go
    you didn't have to die
    and leave us here alone

    the attempt of suicide
    an overwhelming thought
    to feel as lonely as you did
    and to take that shot

    why did you feel as empty as you did
    like you had nothing left except to throw your life away




    Submitted on 2007-06-10 18:46:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
       what a sad but beautiful piece. I really like this one. I'm sorry that you lost your friend. may he rest in peace. take care:)
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      aww. dae. I'm gonna cry.
    | Posted on 2007-06-11 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is good. ilike it. keep writing. you are good at what you do. i hope things get better. if you need to talk about about anything, im around, and you dont have to worry about me blabbin my mouth cuz i dont have time for drana. good work. continue to post. i look forward to reading more by you.



    tina
    | Posted on 2007-06-10 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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