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From the moment I saw You


Author: darkwiccan14
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for my "sweet" lol


From the moment I saw You



From the moment I saw you,
I knew you were the one,
From the moment I saw you,
You were shinning just like the sun.

Your smile ,
Picture perfect,
Your eyes,
Cause an illuminating effect,
And you,
I love it when you just give me
the simplist peck.

From the moment I saw you,
You were my new dream come
True,
From the moment I saw you,
All I wanted to say is
I love you.

Knowledge so keen and yet bright,
Personality shone through your thoughts
like light,
And those simple trivial thoughts,
Make it so hard to write,
What is wrong...or right.

From the moment I saw you,
You,
Just you,
Can help me through these dismal times,
Why were all those other girls so blind?

Thanks for being there everytime,
I love it and you were always,
A good sign.

From the moment I saw you,
You were my new dream come
True,
From the moment I saw you,
All I wanted to say is
I love you.




Submitted on 2007-06-10 20:58:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Thats nice (I only read the fist half cuz I am not good at keeping focus)
| Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful. Simple. Articulate.
It's weaved in a gorgeous pattern.
| Posted on 2007-06-11 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]


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