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    dots Submission Name: subtle futuresdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotssubtle futuresdots
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    upon hushing
    fall within
    & rip a shiny new world
    where the eyes are for
    pouring inward
    with the pinkish steeples
    of your palm
    the one that you use
    to cup the breasts
    of all the fallen angels
    in your chest

    my love is a cancer
    that i'm constantly dying from
    yet it keeps me alive somehow
    through all the terror
    of my enlightened futures
    like a beautiful acorn
    where all my dreams contain
    the scattered marbles
    of my childhood gaming




    Submitted on 2007-06-10 21:43:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, i like this alot actually. it flows really well, and i love the feeling of reading it. nice job.
    | Posted on 2007-06-12 00:00:00 | by save me | [ Reply to This ]


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