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    dots Submission Name: Blood Rosesdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsBlood Rosesdots
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    Blood roses
    blood roses
    your thorns are
    atrocious
    so full in bloom
    deadly just by holding you
    I'm bleeding so deeply
    I'm cleaning it descretly
    yet it comes out
    as I give a shout

    It pours to the floor
    wondering how much more
    blood do you need
    roses of greed
    I want it all to end
    but yet it begins
    death by a rose
    I should have known

    Blood roses
    dead roses
    with thorns so
    atrocious
    I lay at your side
    for I have died
    no more bleeding
    for I kept on giving
    fueled your thirst
    with my blood first
    then my soul you have taken
    a rose forsaken




    Submitted on 2007-06-10 22:46:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      &#8220;the thorns are atrocious&#8221; And in this poem the roses represents life. Life as a rose is beautiful, but as a rose, life has thorns in it as well... Hoped I explained the meaning of the poem well enough. Thanx for reading it, peace and stay safe...
    | Posted on 2007-07-13 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good, im trying to figure out though what the roses mean. if it stands for romance or love than i can see the view point. Interesting how you say they look atrocious yet you pick them up as if they are desirable . The image given by this poem is very pleasent in a dark sort of way. hope to see more. very good job
    | Posted on 2007-06-13 00:00:00 | by Seraphim X | [ Reply to This ]


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