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    dots Submission Name: "eXperiencE eXtremE"dots
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    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 795
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 922



    Description:
       For ... the perfect fantasy.


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    dots"eXperiencE eXtremE"dots
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    Delight - my eyes walk on illusion.
    And sometimes they find lights white fusion.
    From time to thought they master rain.
    Beyond the fear, above the pain -
    Surreal and monochrome intrusion...

    They stay and rest, watch through the letter.
    The lines like waves, the sea - black matter.
    On white dreams and grey lithium mist.
    They want the dream and can't resist.
    This drug is so much better...

    The eyes become a trapped soul's mirror.
    The nightly silence now is dimmer.
    They long for passions long lost lies.
    And trust the demon in disguise.
    And oh, they envy this dark sinner...

    And as they open, clouds split up -
    Beneath is hell, darkness above
    And left, right- wrong, just words and play
    And there is nothing left to say.
    ...Extreme experience of Love...




    Submitted on 2007-06-11 05:58:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it. i dont quite understand it. explain it to me on my page. thanks


    tina
    | Posted on 2007-06-11 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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