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    dots Submission Name: old waysdots
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    Author: Charlie Poppins
    ASL Info:    22, female, England
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 71/85/65
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    I heard your song the other night, the one that used to make me flinch,
    Donít listen to much music these days; itís not a sensible way to live.
    I donít wear my scarves anymore, and I tie my hair up to sleep,
    Itís not that I miss the old days, my lost ways, country sunset rays,
    Itís just that Iím not sure if this is the Ďmeí I want to keep.

    I keep my face delicate and my mouth blasť,
    Donít wear anything too involved or emotional,
    Itís not that Iíd be turned away, I just wouldnít be as promotional.
    I still behave aloof, an image of unavailability,
    Is this what i wanted to make of me?







    Submitted on 2007-06-11 13:28:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I like this writing. It may be the first time I've ever seen "emotional" rhymed with "promotional".

    I definitely got the 'lyrical' feel of it, and I'd like to hear it worked into a song!
    | Posted on 2007-06-11 00:00:00 | by brich2929 | [ Reply to This ]


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