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    dots Submission Name: My Lifedots
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    Author: DarkenedSoul147
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/0/3
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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    Description:
       i wrote this not too long ago right after i cut myself. it seemed that i was always a disappointment to everybody so i decided to make myself feel better by cutting. it was also punishment for being such a loser.


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    dotsMy Lifedots
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    At first I thought it was just a dream
    a nightmare of my mind
    then the pain awakens the memory
    and I look ant my body to find

    Red lines sketched so carefully
    upon my delicate skin
    did nobody ever realize
    the pain I hold within

    I drop to my knees
    and cry into my hands
    because I could never meet
    everyone's demands

    I take out my new best friend
    she shines and reflects the light
    I start to cut lightly at first
    as the tears blur my sight

    Deeper and deeper
    the blade seems to go
    there is no way
    that nobody is going to know

    But i guess it doesn't matter
    much to me anymore
    because one day maybe
    I shall wash up on the shore

    they will mourn for awhile
    but soon shall place me in the ground
    as I sleep peacefully and silently
    not ever making another sound




    Submitted on 2007-06-11 17:04:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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