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    dots Submission Name: Only See Deathdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    look at what i had
    see how happy i was
    this guy changed my life
    saved me from myself
    i managed to screw it up
    as i always seem to do
    i sit and cry
    watch the world laugh in my face
    defeated again
    by the one that i love
    i dont wish this apon anyone
    a new day comes
    but soon does it end
    i choose not to live
    but just to pretend
    hurt by my family
    hurt by my friends
    no one to turn to
    its just me in the end
    standing on the edge
    ready to give up
    sick of this life
    and having to get back up
    the easy way out
    is infront of my face
    the only thing i know
    the only thing thats true
    till the day i die
    my heart beats for you
    although we are friends
    it will never seem enough
    the love we shared
    was like my life
    never did i expect it to end
    things happen for a reason
    i got what i deserve
    the only thing i want
    is for you to be happy
    with your new girl
    always will i be broken
    forever ill be scarred
    but in the end
    ill only see death




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