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    dots Submission Name: R.I.P My Baby Girl Amelia Jadedots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 674
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 990



    Description:
       This is Written For My Daughter Who i never Got To See Or Hold
    its Been Almost Two Years I Still cant Forgive Him For Doing This To You


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    dotsR.I.P My Baby Girl Amelia Jadedots
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    6 months to call you mine
    a child who i would soon give life
    a guy who never seemed to care
    a story that will never be read
    your tiny hands i will never hold
    your fragile body will never grow
    the name i chose willo not be given
    the clothes i bought never to be worn
    the song i wrote you will never hear
    my love for you will never die
    your now an angel in the sky
    sometimes i shed a single tear
    but my memory lives on
    he may have taken you away
    but in my heart you will stay
    my baby girl my love my life
    it all ended that horrible night
    your gentle kick ill never feel again
    your broken heart will never mend
    one day soon ill see you thought
    ill give up this world and everything i know
    to be with you nothing means more
    i miss you
    i love you
    my baby girl
    R.I.P Amelia jade
    15/06/05
    Forever In My Heart




    Submitted on 2007-06-12 00:07:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's a lovely poem. I won't patronise you by saying I know how you must have felt when I know I don't, but I think I understand it better than I would do otherwise. Thankyou for posting that
    | Posted on 2007-06-12 00:00:00 | by Lord Bane | [ Reply to This ]


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