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    dots Submission Name: Heathcliff's Balladdots
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    Author: prettybaby
    Elite Ratio:    6.59 - 191/194/59
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       Wuthering Heights. This poem outlines the troubled situation of one of the main characters.


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    dotsHeathcliff's Balladdots
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    Her sweet lips lay cold and dry
    the night she slipped away.
    She forgot to want my touch
    as she died before the day.

    I cried not for a day or two,
    or a week of endless tears;
    my agony ran deep enough
    to cry for months and years.

    A ghost of love disturbed me
    night by voiceless, violent night.
    My tortured sorrow lit within
    my heart a wicked light.

    I sought revenge for my true love
    from those who stole her heart;
    I fought against her dearest kin
    to preserve my lifeless art.

    She swore to never leave me
    though she be buried deep;
    the church could fall upon her
    and still she would not sleep.

    But she is just a spirit
    that haunts me in my dreams.
    No pain that I cause anyone
    will bring her back to me.

    My hatred has failed
    to cure my aching heart.
    It seems that destiny has ruled
    we spend eternity apart.

    Rain pours through the window
    as I call her pretty name.
    I lie here without her love,
    alone until the grave.




    Submitted on 2007-06-12 00:29:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The title of this poem caught my attention— for I thought "Hmm! I want to read a poem about Heathcliff!" and I assumed it was the Heathcliff from Wuthering Heights, and it was. Yay!

    "No pain that I cause anyone
    will bring her back to me."

    mmm this is a nice phrase, and it seems to fit his character/the story so well, too!

    "My hatred has failed
    to cure my aching heart.
    It seems that destiny has ruled
    we spend eternity apart."

    this stanza seems to be out of line with the others... it just doesn't read the same. It could be alright if it didn't follow the same structure as the others, but since it looks like it is meant to sound the same... it should. But I did enjoy this overall!

    Peace, Lucydiamond
    | Posted on 2007-06-12 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      'My hatred has failed
    to cure my aching heart.
    It seems that destiny has ruled
    we spend eternity apart.'

    doesn't work as well as the others. You usually keep to your meter pretty well but it falters a bit here. Also the use of sleep so close to each other in rhyming positions here >

    'and still she would not sleep.

    But she is just a spirit
    that haunts me in my sleep.'

    doesn't seem right. Something different would probably work better. Overall though I thought you represented the novel fairly well. Your structure and rhyme are quite simple but I think that works well for what you're trying to do here.

    Thanks for the read.
    | Posted on 2007-06-12 00:00:00 | by Predator | [ Reply to This ]


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